I quickly built that team for her earlier:
New Flower Tactica [aka share your best teams here]-honeyteam.jpg
It works pretty well. At least as long as there is no pest with accuracy buff (it still work but Honeysuckle die obviously).
Crinum is nice and currently available as reprint event 5* until 04/12. If you have not, you should consider getting her.

About your team, I'd say Crit rate is useless for Honeysuckle. She will get 100% rate after being attacked. With her natural Special evade and Miss debuff, she could be always at 100% Crit rate after turn 2 with Provoke FM. I prefer giving her more special evade with Swimsuit Usagigiku. Or some retain HP.
I don't say your team is bad though. I didn't though to focus on Crit and offense with her but with 15% combo hit twice, that's an interesting option. I think Honeysuckle is very good on offense and defense sides.

For FM, I would give her something more selfish like the second castle FM or the +40% self boss atk/boss dmg.